Warden II: Phantom & Sword

Synopsis

A story depicting the inner struggles of person struggling with lukewarm faith. Stylized as a battle manga, the protagonist fights the Christ within his mind. This is a continuation from Warden I, and will be compiled together into one book!

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DRAFT

[COVER]

Phantom and Sword
 

page 1 Authors johnzwei Updated almost 3 years ago

DRAFT

N: It is said regarding truth.. That it is "sharper than any two-edged sword, piercing to the division of soul and of spirit of joints and of marrow… and discerning the thoughts and intentions of the heart. No creature is hidden from his sight, but all are naked and exposed to the eyes of him to whom we must give account.”

page 2 Authors johnzwei Updated almost 3 years ago

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Christ swings the blade several times while human barely dodges.  The blade cuts the human’s hair. He looks good with shorter hair, less like an animal.  Unfortunately he goes berserk over the lost hairs falling between his fingers.  Show anger and insanity in eyes

C: Exposure is offensive. Truth exposes darkness, and it wounds the pride.  High strung will and exacting intellect overflows of pride and the wounded pride of a fool responds erratically.

page 3 Authors johnzwei Updated almost 3 years ago

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Human goes through a crazy transformation into something feral.  Lots of power: the overflowing of angry pride. It charges at Christ
C: This is my true adversary. 

page 4 Authors johnzwei Updated almost 3 years ago

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Does a hit and sends Christ flying into prison.
C: Such force! 
N: It shapes truth into something… more accommodating… into something it knows well in the confines of these walls. 

page 5 Authors johnzwei Updated almost 3 years ago

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Human's hand is smoking from the force of the hit.

Christ is recovering from the hit.  A giant hole is ripped from his shoulders - he holds the sword with the other hand.
N: Truth that was once the straight path to your desired rebirth is marred as an acceptable lie.  Such delusion…
 

page 6 Authors johnzwei Updated almost 3 years ago

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Human charges into the prison for Christ, dragging his broken hand on the walls in rage and intellect: sharpening the bone for an edge.
C: Even in blind rage he is still calculating…

Flashback to when he pulled spine out

C: Yet, for all this intellect, he can’t figure out that this hurts himself.

page 7 Authors johnzwei Updated almost 3 years ago

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Human jabs, and Christ dodges and swings back.  Both jump back.

They engage again and sword clashes with sharpened bone.  Human does a round house kick and Christ dodges with a duck.  Human jumps in mid air and thrusts with other leg.  Christ, unable to dodge again takes hit in the chest and slides back.

page 8 Authors johnzwei Updated almost 3 years ago

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